Holiday Writing

 Wednesday 20 October 2021

WALT:  Write a descriptive piece of writing that engages the Reader

School holidays and Lockdown number 2

Morena Koutou,  

1. Today and tomorrow you are asked to express yourself by writing your true feelings, about the exciting and not so exciting times during the school holiday break.  You are also asked to write a paragraph about  your thoughts on Covid-19.  Do you agree or disagree with the people protesting for their freedom to choose to vaccinate as opposed to this government's compulsory stance that all teachers and health workers must be vaccinated prior to 1 January 2022, if they want to continue to work in their chosen professions.   Thank you.

The holidays

During the school holidays the coolest day was when Mum, Dad, Toby, Jake and I went to Rangiputa.  Mum told Jake, Toby and I to “get ready for the beach!”  When we were ready dad shouted “Let’s take the Safari to the beach!”  We were at the end of Rangiputa and there was a wooden post stopping us from going the way and to make people go the right way but dad didn’t listen.  The first thing I did when we stopped was get dressed into my togs. I saw Toby, Dad and Jake run off so I sprinted to catch up with them,  on my way I spotted a wooden boat and three mallet.  At the end of the track Dad, Jake and Toby had already turned around. I just walked back, I went to my Mum and she suggested “have a swim?”   I put my toes in the water and it was ice cold Then Jake started splashing me so I jumped in I found a warm spot that I stayed in shrimps started going on me and then I caught one then I swam over to a deep part and there were some baby mallet that I tried to catch one but they kept on swimming away.  This lady came to give Dad a crawling  so we had to go. I jumped out of the water to get changed and to go.

Puheke     

I thought that we were going but when we went to Puheke we were the only people on the beach.  I decided to have a quick walk because it was nearly dinner time.  I saw some bluebottle jellyfish. I didn't know what it was at first so I brang it back to the truck mum and dad mumbled to “put it back in the water and well you're there wash our hands for dinner!”   For dinner we had sausage with hash brown on bread Mum Called “we're going soon so after your sandwich you have to pack up your things.”  when we did all those things we hopped in the truck  when we arrived Dad ardent “get ready for bed!”

My choice of COVID-19

I agree that people should have a Pro-choice about getting their covid vaccine, because everyone's choice matters.  I also agree that the government shouldn't make it so if teachers, Nurses, dentists, Doctors and people like that are to be fully vaccinated by 1 January 2022 because I think they should at least have one vaccine by then.  I think that they should say “it would be better if you have your second vaccine by then.”  So people don’t get fired.      

Narrative

 Monday 27 September 2021

WALT: Add descriptive features to my Narrative

It was a humid sunny day. There was a time traveller called Zack.  Zack had blonde hair and blue eyes, He always had circle glasses and hated fitness. Well, his kitten, named Bow, Was more fit and hated cat food so he preferred Zack's food, Bow was brown with white patches on him.  Zack had finally worked out where he wanted to travel. To a wonderful Tropical island, Zack knew there were Cheetahs that might have wanted to bite his face off but he would take the risk only because his three sisters Hannah,  Erin and Ellery had gone to a tropical island.   Zack was quickly going in the time traveller thing when Bow leaped in there without him knowing, the cat was meowing because he was starving. Zack had realised Bow was there, But it was too late Bow had to be on this adventure.  When he arrived he straight away set up camp for the night Zack had packed: Delicious pancakes for breakfast, Steak for Dinner, pillow and a blanket.  It had become sunset and Zack had had dinner so he decided to have a rest and have an adventure in the morning.   Bow had woken up and he was starving so he woke up Zack.  Both Bow and Zack had breakfast and were all ready for their walk.  Hours past Bow had spotted an enormous CHEETAH that looked very hungry.

Bow started meowing and meowing but Zack angrily shouted “Bow you just had breakfast. I wish I never let you come here and go to the time machine!!!”  Bow pretended to go back but he was worried about Zack so Bow carried on walking.  Later Zack decided to head back and when he turned around he saw the CHEETAH, The cheetah had not seen him so he quickly played dead with hope that the cheetah thought he was dead.  Soon the cheetah had left and Zack rowed away to  the campsite.  When Zack returned he saw Bow happily licking himself  Zack was raving when he saw Bow.  All night Zack was terrified knowing that the Cheetah was on the island.  Early in the morning Zack told bow “we're going to go soon.”  But the time machine was making a weird noise.  Zack tried to fix it but it was no hope they now had two problems: The Cheetah, The time machine was broken and they had no food.  All day Zack was working on the machine well Bow was catching food.   After two hours of working on the time machine Zack had fixed it he yelled “we're going home!!!”  Bow ran to Zack with excitement.

They both quickly hopped in the time machine and went home.  Now they think of where they go.

Self Assessment

I improved my writing by:

• Doing conversation marks properly 

• Doing two spaces after a full stop

• Proofread better

To improve in next time 

• Use better words 

• Add more comers

• To do Show not tell 

             

          

Week 8 Writing

 M Success Criteria:

I have proof-read my writing to ensure I have:

• Juicy sentence starters

• Correct punctuation - Capital letters, full stops, commas, speech marks, exclamation and question marks.

• A speech conversation in the body of my writing

• A simile in the body of my writing

• Read my writing to ensure it makes sense.

14 September 2021

WALT:  Follow the sequence of Narrative writing

Title:The Wolves

Deep throughout the woods on a humid sunny afternoon.  A little girl with brown hair along with green eyes named Koda got sent off to pick blueberries for her family.   Quickly she set off for the berries.  As she walked off an old man named Feddie with snow white hair, with bright turquoise eyes was enjoying a cup of tea just before getting ready to journey out deep in the woods to collect firewood.  Meanwhile Koda was jogging away deeper in the woods searching for a good blueberry plant.  Koda spotted a nice blueberry plant appearing in the distance when she finished picking the blueberries she saw an animal.  It turned out to be a WOLF with raf gray fur and red eyes.  Koda had fallen into its den.

Koda was terrified of wolves, Her heart froze, Koda’s mind went blank. When her memory went back and she tried to think of something quick a couple seconds later she finally thought of something.  Running away wouldn’t be a good idea however it was the only thing she could think of.  Koda dropped all her blueberries and started sprinting away.  She stopped because there was a hole and the wolf casually went closer.  Koda started yelling “help!!! help!!!”

Now there was another problem: she got exhausted.  She had been in the exact same spot for two whole minutes.  Then she realized that the whole time she could have just gone on the other side of the hole that she had been standing by for almost three minutes.  Koda decided it was a fantastic idea and it worked when the wolf fell into the whole.  Half an hour later she heard a weird sound that she thought was a chain saw so Koda followed the noise.  It turned out to be Freddie collecting his firewood.  Freddie asked Koda “do you want to come home with me?” Koda replied “absolutely.” She never told anyone what she had been through.

Self Assessment

What I liked about my writing

• I learnt a lot about writing and how to make it better

• I could use my imagination 

• I had heaps of ideas

What I need to improve in

• Write my speech conversations proply 

• Improve my proof-reading skills

• Stay focussed and on task for longer periods                 

  

 

  

T3 Asttle writing

 22 September 2021

WALT:  Express myself in Narrative Writing

As the sun slowly set, two girls Ruby and Cj were calibrating new years by taking a bus ride deep in a dark green Jungle. They were two best friends.  Cj had dark brown hair and when she was in the sunlight it turned a golden colour.  Cj had dark brown eyes that looked like black, Ruby had ginger hair with blue eyes Ruby was allergic to strawberries so Cj tried not to eat them.  As they went into the bus and looked at the man driving the bus they both knew by the look he was cranky his name was Jake and he had black hair, they couldn’t see his eyes because his hair covered them.  Five hours later they arrived in the Jungle for a walk then headed back to the bus and carried on their journey.  Ruby leaped out of the bus and started to jog. Cj slowly followed her.  When they decided to turn around they had a quick snack, but when they got back Jake put the pedal to the mettle leaving them behind. It was because he saw a red dragon coming.

Lost

“What the” cried Cj “Where lost and he left us behind?”  Ruby  and Cj had to find their way back, They were both angry and confused why he left.  Ruby suggested “I’ll collect food and you make a shouter that will keep us through the night.”  When Ruby returned to the camp site with the food it was still sunset, They both weren't looking forward to the night.  Ten hours later both Ruby and Cj woke up by a howling sound  that spoucked them both out the sound got louder and louder Ruby wispeard “there's  a animal bigger than an elephant looking at us?”  Cj replied with “It's a dragon.”  Cj went to pat the dragon but it didn’t bite her.  Ruby and Cj were shocked “It didn’t bite her?” Wondering Ruby in Cj’s mind she thought “Is this a dream?”  The dragon was very curious Ruby jumped on it’s back.  Then Cj, The dragon flew off Cj yelled “Ruby I think I should steer because I can ride a horse!!!”  

Then Ruby switched sides; she spotted the town they lived in and told Cj “Stop!”  The dragon dashed to the ground and they hopped off the dragon flew away then Ruby and Cj lived happily ever after.       

        

           

ZM Writing

14 September 2021

WALT:  Follow the sequence of Narrative writing

Title:The Wolves

Deep throughout the woods on a humid sunny afternoon.  A little girl with brown hair along with green eyes named Koda got sent off to pick blueberries for her family.   Quickly she set off for the berries.  As she walked off an old man named Feddie with snow white hair, with bright turquoise eyes was enjoying a cup of tea just before getting ready to journey out deep in the woods to collect firewood.  Meanwhile Koda was jogging away deeper in the woods searching for a good blueberry plant to pick.  Koda spotted a nice blueberry plant appearing in the distance when she finished picking the blueberry plant she saw an animal.  It turned out to be a WOLF with raf gray fur and red eyes.  Koda had fallen into its den.

Koda was terrified of wolves and her heart froz .  Koda’s mind went blank. When her memory went back and she tried to think of something quick.  Couple seconds later she finally thought of something.  Running away wouldn’t be a good idea however it was the only thing she could think of.  Koda dropped all her blueberries and started sprinting away.  She stopped because there was a hole and the wolf casually went closer.  Koda started yelling “help!!! help!!!”

Now there was another problem: she got exhausted.  She had been in the exact same spot for two whole minutes.  Then she realized that the whole time she could have just gone on the other side of the hole that she had been standing by for almost three minutes.  Koda decided it was a fantastic idea and it worked when the wolf fell into the whole.  Half an hour later she heard a weird sound that she thought was a chain saw so Koda followed the noise.  It turned out to be Freddie collecting his firewood.  Freddie asked Koda “do you want to come home with me?” Koda replied “absolutely.” She never told anyone what she had been through.

Self Assessment

What I liked about my writing

• I learnt a lot about writing and how to make it better

• I could use my imagination 

• I had heaps of ideas

What I need to improve in

• Write my speech conversations probably  

• Improve my proof-reading skills

• Stay focused and on task for longer periods                 

  

 

  

ZM L2 Back To School

09.09.21

WALT:Describe how I'm feeling about L2 back to school.

This morning, I woke up at 6:30am excited to see my friends at school.  I  made Mum and Dad a cup of coffee and Dad told me “It's school today” and I replied “It's work today!” Mum butted in to say “You should get dressed?” I replied “Okay.” I went to my room and got dressed. Next I mumbled to Jake “I woke in the middle of night because you were sleep talking about covid” after that he was speechless so he walked away as slow as a sloth trying to make a comeback. I ran into the lounge to make lunch.  I heard Toby moaning because he had to clean his room (he didn’t).  At 7:40am I leaped into the car without breakfast.  Jake sulked to the car.

When Mum dropped me off at the school drop off as soon as mum hit the brakes I sprinted off saying “Bye!” When I finally put a step on the classroom deck, Alani came running at me and started saying what she’s been doing.  But I had no interest in what she was saying and I told her the stuff I've been doing.  We  raced off to the playground to wait for the bell to ring.  We went on the monorail and the slides, the bell finally rang and we shot off to class.

In class Mrs Jujnovich was doing the roll and got interrupted by sir saying things about school then when Sir finished Mrs Jujnovich carried on with the roll so we could do karakia and mihi. Nico recited karakia and mihi did mihi Alani, Grace and Lucy did waiata starters.  Next we did writing so we can be Golden Child. We were writing for about one hour.  We jogged to the court for Golden Child then got into two groups. I was put into group one the first round team one won, The second time but the last time team two did.

The thing I enjoyed the most was seeing my friends because I hadn't seen them in three weeks.   

            

 

Mittens

 

Mr Mittens

He has a black back and tummy but his tummy has snow white fur under his head.  He has White mittens on his feet and green eyes.  Mr Mittens likes to run around and attack paper balls he hides in dark places, hunts and watches the eels. We also call him Mittens. Mittens is 9 years old and a male cat.  Mittens massage the blankets in the middle of the night.  Mittens is as smart as an owl.   

Mittens is a fussy eater so he won’t eat steak, lamb or pork so we feed him cat biscuits.  He also looks at the eels and waits for an opportunity to catch one.  We also give him meat with jelly looking stuff in it but he only eats the jelly stuff.  He will also catch baby mice and if we are away for long enough he will catch birds.  When he finishes his food he always meows for more.  

Sometimes mittens play’s tag with me but when I'm in he just comes to me.  He also goes on his back and if I don’t rub his

My person

 

My dad has dark, short, straight, rough hair and patches of grey around his gigantic and floppy ears, With dark green eyes and his smile is huge with black fine eyebrows. He has sparkling white teeth that make a massive shiny smile.   a nose as enormous as an elephant.  Arms are humongous and muscly that can touch the sky. He has hairy legs with big feet.  His left leg has a big scar from getting cut by a chainsaw. My dad is as brave as a lion. 

My favourite time that I have spent with my dad is when we went to the Waitangi bike track. We went up big hulls and I did a huge drift and my dad was the only one who saw it.  Me and my dad went on the level 3 track and my dad got confused cause we were going the wrong way.   

Speeches

Hi, my name is Zana and I'm going to be telling you why my cat Mittens is an important part of my family.  Mittens is 9 years old with green eyes and we call him Mittens because he's black with white mittens. We've had him for 5 years. Mittens is a male cat.  He's also really silly like when I scrunch up a piece of paper and throw it at him he attacks it like it's a mouse.  Mittens always hides in dark places like under the cars and under the house.  Once he got stuck in my dad's shed for about 3 days.  Mittens is not at all quiet.  But once when we took him to the vets he was so loud.

Mittens sleeps on my bed on the blankets next to me and in the middle of the night I heard a weird sound and I realised it was Mittens massaging the blankets while purring. He also sleeps in mum's room on a dark red soft cushion. He also sleeps outside and in the morning he meows louder than the rooster next door.  In the morning I see him stretching on the door to come in.    

Mittens is a fussy eater so he won’t eat steak, lamb or pork so we feed him cat biscuits.  He also looks at the eels and waits for an opportunity to catch one.  We also give him meat with jelly looking stuff in it but he only eats the jelly stuff.  He will also catch baby mice and if we are away for long enough he will catch birds. When he finishes his food he always meows for more.

Sometimes mittens play’s tag with me but when I'm in he just comes to me.  He also goes on his back and if I don’t rub his tummy he hits me with his paw.   Mittens also hops on the tramp with me and he doesn’t let me do anything on the tramp apart from doing stuff for him.    

Facts about cats

Did you know cats can jump six times their length  

Did you know that Cats are believed to be the only mammals who don't taste sweetness.  

Cats can rotate their ears 180 degrees.

A group of cats is called a clowder, a male cat is called a tom, a female cat is called a molly or queen while young cats are called kittens.

There are over 500 million domestic cats in the world.

Cats can be allergic to perfume, and cleaning products.

 

 

What not to feed your cat

Don’t feed your cat Chocolate, Raw eggs, Dog food, Bread,yeast,

Onions and garlic.

Thank-you for listening to my speech.  If you don’t have a pet at home I think that you should get one 

Mothers day

 WALT: Write a Mothers Day letter

I think my mum should be chosen because she helps

me when I'm stuck.  Every day when I get home she

makes yum as dinner and takes me to netball.  She

lets me do anything at home, and she cheers me

up when I'm sad.  My Mum is also really kind, she’s

always there when I need her.  She gives me ideas

for my learning all the time.  Mum is always there to

support me and she takes me to my friends house.

water fun day

 heres my writing of the water fun day

Recount of our Water fun day.

Yesterday me and the girls in my class dashed to the changing room to get

into our togs for our water fun afternoon at our school.  We got changed

really quick so I could race into line for Mrs Radich to give instructions. 

I was so excited because we have never done this before.  Mrs Radidich

told us to “bring your towel!”  and Mrs Bryden told us not to.     

The first thing we did was the first water slide. 

I went down on my tummy.  A little later loads of

little kids came in line. Then Koda told me and Alani that

“There were more activities to do.”  Then I replied that Alani

moaned “but there's prickles.”  So we left and the next activity

was one that I didn’t go on so I played with Lucy , Lucy excitedly

told me “This is so fun!”  Koda and Alani finished on the blue tunnel. 

Whaea Deb showed us photos of people going down the tunnel.  The faces they

made were funny Me , Kaydee , Lucy , Koda and Alani sped to the other slippery

water slide.  It was so amazing.  At last we skipped to the freezing cold pool where

there were balls to play with.  Koda mumbled “to sit on the balls!”  So we did Alani

and I hopped out to play with the bubbles , Samson kept on squirting me and Alani so

we blew bubbles at him.  Then me , Koda and Alani dashed to the water slide and

skipped around the field.  We were just about to wash in the pool and I complained

“everyone is packing up.”  So we wash in the sprinkler.  Afterwards we rushed to the Te Kauru bathroom to get changed

into our warm clothes. Mihi cried “I forgot my shorts can someone

get them?”  Me and Koda giggled, “We would get them.”  When

all the girls came back inside we talked about the day.Reflection

I loved the pool because we could play with the balls and water guns.  

The next thing I liked was   water slides because you dash so fast and you got all soapy.  

My last favourite is the sprinklers because you could run in them and have fun. I will love to do it again. 

Tsunami Warning

 8 March 2021

WALT: Writing a Narrative

Tsunami Warning Friday 05/03/21

On Friday 05/03/21 we got a Tsunami Warning.  First we grabbed our bags    and went to the Whare.  Second, we started walking to mount Ngatu.  I saw 

students climbing over the gate and cars passing by.  I was worried about my cat Mittens.  I could see Mrs Davan carrying people up the mountain.  Thirdly, we went up the mountain to a high spot, and I kept on walking into spiky gorse.  I just couldn’t wait to get up the mountain and have morning tea. 

When we got to the spot we had some water and morning tea and I put on my hat and talked to Alani.  I could see 90 Mile Beach, Lake Ngatu, town, Ahipara and Lake Rotokawa.  That made me scared because we were near water.  Next the teachers decided to move onto a higher spot.  When we got there me, Kaydee, Lucy, Mrs Jujnovich and Alani played eye spy. Then lots of people played Charades.  I heard lots of students talking and playing.  Also I played with the gorse.  Sir came with the gazebo and the BBQ, so we moved to a smoother spot.   

When moved to the smover spot Yvette put a blanket down so me and Alani could sit on it.  Then the teachers made a sausage sizzle.  I kept on seeing rabbits.  When me and Alani had eaten our sausage sizzle we had a big talk and after a while a big black cricket went into my pants.  Me and Alani had some peaches.  Then a little kid came and sat by us.  We did waiata practise, and then the teachers said we could talk.

After that, we went down the hill and crossed the road to Yvettes farm.  I could hear loud cars passing and I could see white flowers. Then we arrived at school to get ready for home.  I felt happy that there was no Tsunami but I was scared that one was coming.  My favourite part was the spot and we could see all the places.  

Then we went to the bus and pick-up lines.  We were there for a little bit and my mum turned up.  Then she went and talked to Mrs Stevenson for about 20 mins and I talked to Jake and Toby. 

pobble writing

 

Story starter!

The wind rushed through her hair as she descended the mountain at great speed. For most children this would be an exhilarating, even terrifying experience, but for Zana it was just an ordinary journey to school 

She was having an amazing time until her bag slipped and she grabbed it with her hook.But then there was another problem: the rope was snapping behind her so Zana pulled up her back and and it was coming to her fast she had to do something but what.Zana was going full speed,the rope was snapping Zana fort she was a goner but then she saw a lake Zana quickly jumped in.then she got dride and went to school. 

This Morning

This morning 26.02.21

Getting out of bed.

My mum and dads Alarm clock went of I see my cat cleaning I hear my mum and dads phones.So I walk to my wardrobe to get out of my warm Pigamers and into my cold clothes.Then I kept on walking to the lounge to make the school lunches with my mum.After  I brushed my hair and put on some sunscreen.

Breakfast.

I went to the fridge to get the yogurt and the watermelon.Then I sat down and ate my breakfast and read a book.

Traveling.

I got my stuff and raced to the stinky car and we drove off to school.  Next I heard Toby moaning, I saw the school bus mum was trying to catch up to so that Jake could get onto the bus.  Finally, we arrived at school.

   

My Speech

 WALT present a persuasive speech.

What I did well come up with good ideas,speak clearly because I normally mumble.Saying it in front of the seniors

What do I think that I need to improve in for next time.going slower, more expression.More eye contact

here's my speech 

video and writing 

Do you think that it is important for children to play outside? Because I do and I think that you should too. Today I'm going to tell you my reasons why it is important for children to play outside.

You will get fit When kids run they get happier, kinder and fitter than their peers. When you're on technology you will get angry like my brother. If you play outside more you’ll live a healthier life.

  

You’ll get strong because all you will be doing is exercising. There’s different types of exercising like practising sports,outside jobs,wheels and stuff that will make you healthy. But inside there's only stuff like technology,inside job’s,playing in your room, writing and reading and that's not going to make you healthy at all.

You can create new games like Jake,Toby and I made up a game called tramp tag.You can add more staff to games.  

now i'm going to tell you Why I like exercising   

I will get a happy life because as I said before if you're on technology you’ll be grumpy. I can learn more outside activities and show them to my friends,teachers and family.I will always have something to do.I will not always be bored and I can spend more time on my tramp,bike and playing with my netball.When im on my technology then it will get annoying like it will say loading,no sinal and barriers and it will come up with heaps of adds but not outside.       

You can do fun adventures and on your adventures you can run,climb,swim and jump.You can also explore on your adventure.If you have a bike or other things with wheels then you can go on it.If you have a pet at home then you can play with it but if you don’t then you can play with your cousins,friends and your siblings and then you won’t be inside in your room having nothing to do.    

And as I said before it is important for kids to be playing outside everyday.

Moment in time writing

WALT use descriptive vocabulary to describe a moment in time.

Here's 2 things what I did well 1. creating my google slide and writing my ides into my writing .Here's 2 things what I found tricky 1. knowing what vocab to write.Finding ides for my plan.How can I extend myself next time by using more and better quality vocab.

Here's my google slide.

Kawa of Care Assembly - draft wirting

WALT understand the Kawa of care.

WALT write a recount about our Assembly experience

Check out my draft writing...

On Friday 1.45 pm it was Te Manga's Assembly.When we were staying Whaea Deb.Put on the trailer then Tuva-lisa,Atama and Alani did there part.They were always on stage then it was time to walk behind the red thing but Mihi,Chase and Koda went on the sets that were on stage and there part. Their video was called no food or drink then it was Kaydee,Edmon,Hori and Larell there.Part was about using 2 hands when moving around with our Chromebook.

then it was Cooper,Reo and Hemi their part was about think about were you sit.Then Koda,Zion, Mihi,Millan,Kaiora and Hori then when they finished it was Chase and my part the audience watched my video then I said (When you are moving around outside the classroom zip your Chromebook up in its carry bag). Then Chase said his part then we walked up and down.then Kaydee,Lucy,Carrie,Grace

did there part.